I have to say, I'm not a big fan of humanized ponies, but I loved the Rainbow Dash pic.

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"There is no normal"

I did. Very interesting story. Not sure what you should do for a new story though. I'm sure you'll find inspiration for one.

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"There is no normal"

Anytime!

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"There is no normal"

Hello.

Your story is good, especially since this is your first fanfic.

Couple of things I'd adjust.

1. Split the story into smaller paragraphs. It makes reading the story easier to do.

2. Add dialogue between you and Applejack. My advice is to watch the episodes that feature her talking alot and then mimic that when typing her lines. For example, instead of "I don't know what you are talking about," Applejack would say, "Ah don' know what yer talkin about." So feel free to add that Southern twang.

3. Read other writers. This isn't to copt them but to just get a sense of how their story flows.

4. You might want to build up more of Chapter one. The pace seemed fast as you went from your parents dying to meeting AJ, to the ponies appearing. Try to add some mystery. Something like this:

"Many people don't know how hard a farm life is. It's an endless struggle between you and nature. The rewards of growing things or raising animals is great, but the time and effort spent getting those rewards is great. I used to think that I was the only one aside from my family that knew how difficult a farm life was, until I met her."

So you have here the mystery of who this "her" is. You also show your feelings about a farm life.

Granted this is all from what I learned from my stories and is not to say that your writing is bad.

Let me know if you have any questions.

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"There is no normal"